Has potential, the elements are there, they just need fleshing-out and more attention to balancing of instrumentation and vocals when it comes to overall mixing. For me the vocals are too upfront, as are the drums. The guitars and synths are kinda lost. You also need to watch your recording levels. The track is clearly pushed too hard, just keep an eye on your waveforms. Better to bring everything down in volume and balance the mix first before pushing the levels too hard. I like the overall style and idea, just needs some polishing.