could definitely use some improvement
i know you've said this is only a demo, and that'd you'd like to improve it, so ill give some impressions/criticisms.
firstly, the guitar strumming sounds almost bowie-esque for some reason, and it doesn't really match up with the melancholy feel that you seem to be going for (judging by the vocals-which weren't great...) and sometimes seems out of tune. its repetitive, and it just sounds off sometimes. this is really a case of a track where some more layers or voices would really help out the variety and flow.
also, i do applaud you for recording vocals, something many people are pretty afraid of doing, but it seems like you don't put much effort into it. most of it is mumbling and off-key, but it seems like you have at least a manageable voice if you really put some effort into it.
anyways, i know this is really an early, rough-draft type of thing, so please don't take this too hard, and just try to improve if you do feel like revisiting/reworking it.
well gee thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Here is some constructive critisism for you though, I am just trying to be helpful not beat you down :). You could definately turn up the bass some, and try not to rush the lyrics too much, sometimes you can't help it I know.
Hmmm... those are the only problems I hear. It does have a nice sound to it overall and if you work at it I am sure this can be 5 star material!
Good job, and don't get discouraged no matter what some of the fools around here say!
hey thanks alot man
i think this is pretty bad
but has a good tune. get a tuner.
its actualy IS in tune, dood. anyway peaople, its a rough draft. i can remake it better i guess but im somewhat lazy..anyway its supposed 2 sound like this. i was depressed
Well, your playing is sloppy and your notes are off in the singing. You should make sure your guitar is in tune, too. With everything out of tune, it makes it a bit painful.
Song definitely has potential though. I like it..rather...definitely what it could be.
its just a demo im going to work on it alot more w/ my real band. thanks 4 encouragement tho. :>