3/5

I'm not going to tell you out loud what you did wrong, because that would be mean of me to do something I know would discourage a young artist. Really, nothing can be wrong, but there are things you could do better. First of all, this piece resembles a lot of playing I knew myself to do, and that was before I knew how to do better improvising. It'll sound good for a while, but it isn't quite a song. Its more like a new-age style of playing. Not quite random, I can see a pattern here, but the notes are still somewhat erratic. Second, the beat in the background is pretty good, though isn't matched up quite how it could be. Its also very soft, and the piano kind of shutters it out. But that's about it. You did good for trying something new. It personally isn't my taste, but that's just me. I'm sure others would think differently. I hope my review is helpful, at the least. Please don't be offended, and keep up the playing! You're getting there!

Sounds like a random noodle-fest.

You might want to brush up on your noodling skills, some parts sound like a child just pressing random notes (not to sound offensive). But, yeah, the war part wasn't all that strong. It would have worked a helluva lot better if you used a minor key there. Also, it sound that some accidentals were placed there unnecesarilly, so all in all, it just sounds like random notes, practice a bit on your improv skills (I'm hopeless at it, so I don't really mess with it unless I develop it into a proper song). I don't mean to sound mean, but it wasn't good. I'd recommend to learn a bit more about how you should progress with a song, get the necessary chords to flow into eachother, and give it the proper climax it deserves. Not bad, but in all honesty, I'm voting 2. (not to discourage you, but not to put on a false attitude and give you the impression that you're really good, you'll develop the necessary skills soon enough).

7 of 10

i like it, it has a constant flow and its not bad for a beginner, but maybe it should have been left just "Peace" cause i didnt find anything that was like War and it was kinda quiet, but dont let me discourage ya!! it was good