Definite improvement from samurai hills and still a lot more room for improvement as well. The voices at the start were too noisy and cracked a bit. Also the sections sounded random and did not join together very coherently. The drum pattern seemed to only consist of a single tom sample played at crotchet intervals.
I have a piece of advice as well. You seem to have composed this in less than a day between now and when I reviewed samurai hills. Spend more time (like, a week) on it and extend it like tellin a story cause my ideas I submit without spending much time on do shitter. After doing this come back after a couple of days and if it still sounds good then you're ready to go. It also helps to force your friends and family to hear it first in case they have some ideas. (only the smart ones)