What up, Z. Ain't got the patience for prose so lets spit this shit out.
Transition from metal to skin on the second gal screams lazy brushing. Nice specular mapping on their armour but its a shame you couldn't do the shame to their headdresses - darker values would pop that shit right out. With the width between her eyes she looks like a salamander.
Warm and cool lights look out of place - shoehorned into the pic. Pretty obvious that you slapped on colour with a "colour" layer. Hair looks like a string mop. Transitional string things between the two girls are just plain weak.
But it's a pretty cool piece, man.
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