I for one like this one, I don't know much about different styles of art, so I don't judge others works, and I know they all try there hardest when drawing these, so I don't criticize only praise
Drawn with mouse?
Shit man, invest in a tablet.
But yeah, my guess that the reason you couldn't get the eyes right was because the forehead is a bit too big. Overall its not bad, especially for mouse drawing, but the color seems bland.
I was going for a little more subtle color to get a more Gothic look.
I'd love to get a tablet. Was talking about that today *LOL*