pretty much nothing good going for it.
there isnt enough detail or expression to justify it being a close up.
there isnt much of a composition since there isnt much in the first place.
technique and design is lacking heavily.
if i didnt read the title i woulnt have any clue what this was suppose to mean, and i still dont know really.

you should start improving your basic drawing skills before trying to do finished work. you can never be too good at the basics and you really need to learn the basics.
if you really want to get better go watch some tutorials and practice the same things every day untill you can do them really fast!