I like the pose but the perspective is really off Dx It almost looks like this is a standing carry position, but then they're laying back on a table, so it looks strange.

The table is enormous too, and it looks like the computer is huge as well, when you're drawing a background, it helps to keep an eye on how it compares to your characters. The computer is behind the girl but the scale doesn't match up when you measure it to the size of her head.

It's great that you tried a complex pose and angle, but it might help to strip away all the extra stuff and just focus on the characters, use reference for the position and build from there.