I'm not exactly the most knowledgeable person on the human form (I specialize more towards abstract art), but I am noticing some moderate to severe flaws in this piece. I will start from the worst offenders that immediately come to mind, and then work down to some things that I would suggest trying for your next piece and/or correcting in this one.
The two biggest flaws in this piece are actually part of the reason why this is rated A: the tits and the penis. Notice how you have appeared to separate the breasts from the form of the girl. This gives the impression that two ovoid lumps are upon a rather flat-chested girl. On top of that, they do not act in accordance with gravity; they are not deforming in the way actual breasts would do in that position. This however is nothing compared to the penis.
The penis first of all appears strangely flaccid. This is because the dick in its natural, soft, state dips down; an erect penis would typically stand straight, or even curve upwards a bit. Next, you have depicted the penetrative act in an impossible way. In this position, the woman's vagina would be oriented horizontally, and the man is trying a vertical penetration. This does not exactly work so well when attempting coitus.
Now for some suggestions: First, I would redesign the boobs to a less circular and more organic design; I would also recommend you connect it to the body. Secondly, I would recommend you add the band of scar tissue/ the foreskin onto the penis, since without it, it gives me the appearance of a mushroom. I would also tone down on the veinwork, since that just looks nasty. Finally, I would suggest making he hair flow freely, since as it is, it just looks like its rock hard and defying gravity.
Overall, I would say this piece is middling to subpar, flaws in the design take what would be a decent piece to below average. I'll at least say that you aren't that bad with this sort of work, and at the very least you would beat a few artists that I know charge commission for their work.
Thank you for your Comment!
I understand that you wanna tell me that there is an
Well! She is an animated Character. Not a live real Women!
Also what i done with her Boobs and his Cock are Done often before.
I agree with you that the Cock Veines look strange! But i cant Change it anymore!
She has no hips, at all. Her ass literally connects to the back of her rib cage, which might explain why her femurs connect at her vagina but that still leaves a desire for explanation over the fact that her breasts are, apparently, being held into an invisible bra and are made of Jello and are, in fact, not attached to her body, not that anything was to begin with. Also, observe the size of her hands in correlation to her face, the length of her arms in proportion to her deformed body and the fact that her shins are twisted 45 degrees away from her thighs. Also observe that her hips are wider than her shoulders which simply should not be. This sir, is not a human being but a homemade blow up doll.
It also doesn't help that the man's little fingers are connected directly to his carpals, nor is it helped by the fact that his index fingers are longer than his middle fingers. I also like how his penis is pulsating with blood yet he's clearly flaccid as it's pointing directly down.
I also "like" how the author thought that this piece was so deserving of its audience that it should transcend it's proper place in the NOT-art portal and appear in the Flash portal, because if there's one thing everyone loves, it's shitacular speed drawing videos.
I respect yout opinion!
But if you dont like it, why you watch it?
CURSE MARK PENIS!!!!
Jking I like how you have the family sex going pretty nice mate :D keep it up
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