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The year is 2075. Being a mercenary is technically an illegal job, but that ain't stopping Clarice Burnstein from taking on military jobs for the highest bidder. As a young girl, she had always been made fun of because of her blue skin, and that has lead her to adopt a tough-as-nails and cynical attitude. Her place of birth is currently unknown, that is until she is hired for a job that will change her current understanding of her birth.

She primarily works alone, but every so often, she brings her partner, Robin on board, a human guy who is down on his luck, but finds solace in working as a mercenary.

While Clarice does the shooting, Robin Mayer fixed machines, often bringing high-powered tanks to the fray if necessary. More on this in a later picture featuring them both.


Things you should look into:

One of the shadows has to go. I'd say, the "first" shadow (the one, that is as big as the character). The other one, where we can see her a bit bigger in the background is ok. But two shadows is too much.

The character's name should not be hidden by the character. Especially, since the black shape at the bottom is in front of the characters legs, the name is in front of the black shape, but the letters are behind the characters legs? That doesn't work out.

The anatomy is a bit off. Her waist is too slim, especially since her hips seem to be quite big.

Things that I like:

The yellow/orange background looks good. It brings some colour into the image and the bright colours work really well here.

The bose Clarice strikes looks good to me. But I think the smoke should be coming from the other gun... but that's just a minor thing. The gun hin her left hand smoking is just as well.

The character itself looks interesting. Maybe a bit clichéd, but much more interesting than yet another "halo like" soldier, etc.

Overall, this piece needs more work, but you are on a good way.

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KiwiSundae responds:

Thank you for your feedback. It's very much appreciated.

This really sucks, I thought she'd be given a cannon, even worse she has those stupid gay as fuck tatoos. No five star for your weird color clashing rubber ducky princess.

KiwiSundae responds:

Would drawing a cannon satisfy you?

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1.46 / 5.00

Dec 8, 2012
10:59 AM EST
File Info
500 x 594 px
240 KB

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