People are being a tad over the top in their reviews considering this is only the first page of something; you can't judge the entire story based on the first page. It's silly to say he's being too cruel, you have no idea what's happening in the story, how do you know it's not absolutely required? Your first reviewer was clearly an imbecile of the highest proportions, too.
That aside, you did as you intended; this first page hits hard and definitely draws the reader in. You immediately want to see this guy brought to brutal justice. The art itself is very aesthetically pleasing, the medium used masterfully, and it's well structured as a comic, too. I'm eager to see the next page!
Thank you. Unfortunately, you'll have to buy the comic to see the next page (check on my website, jmdesantis.com, for the links to Chadhiyana), since this story is only four pages long, and I don't want to give the whole thing away. But the second story (also in the comic) is twelve pages long, so I'll be posting a few from that story very soon.
I don't think the guy below me follows that this is probably leading to the point where the woman turns around and sticks up for herself, like you imply in the comments.
My only complaint is that the man is excessively cruel and villainous- readers will sympathize with the female protagonist without the guy, say, ripping open a baby and drinking it's blood. I'd suggest toning it down a bit just to be less forced.
Well, I won't say too much about the story, but Chadhiyana is not on this page and the title is "A Saviour in the Dark." Strangely, Newgrounds.com is the first website I've posted this on where the responses have been so strong to what is going on in the story. But it was always my intention to really hit people hard with this first page. At least the comments here are letting me know it did what I intended.
wow....I mean just...wow....
Well, it was supposed to invoke a strong response; I suppose I did my job well.
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