A bit too white
I love white, and white on white drawings always have a soft spot with me, but this one is too light. The details aren't intricate enough to warrant the effort put into seeing the actual image. The shapes are too broad and large and make it difficult to really distinguish anything worth while. The paleness of the colors doesn't help either because they don't seem to make any actual sense. Even if they were saturated. I think working with more muted, not just lightened colors would lend itself better to an ephemeral piece. Good effort though trying something that most are afraid to do.