Great job! :)
Yeah the torso is a bit off and the pose seems a bit awkward but overall its not bad your eyes are done really really well and it looks pretty stylized
I don't know how you're going to take this, but here goes.
1. Lack of shading that's visible and reflects the light source correctly.
2. Anatomy of the face and torso is lacking. The pose is wrong, too. Try practicing more dynamic poses.
3. Your perspective is wrong in this case. I don't know if we're supposed to be looking down, or we're supposed to be looking straight at her.
Advice: Just draw from anatomy books/life. Observe where to place parts of the body, and how they look when putting the body together. Look at how your light sources work. I don't know where the light is coming from in this case.
I can see that you show the desire and effort to draw, but you need to practice. Practice makes perfect, and I hope you get better at what you do sometime soon.
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