Good composition and excellent placement of shading, especially on the wall and ground. anatomy is correct. this could be improved by having the shadow on the wall be a very dark brown rather than a straight black, also making the shadows on the ground be darker. on the girl, the darks could be made darker and the lights lighter, considering it looks to be as she is in direct sunlight. aside from shading, the girl's grip on the rifle is very loose and could be made tighter to look more natural. overall the piece lacks any sort of line weight/ difference in line thickness and while i cant offer a specific example i would suggest looking into that. my final suggestion is a question. if the wind is blowing at her, making her scarf flutter back, wouldnt it do the same for her strap on the rifle, and the rope coming off her waist? overall is a good peice and lotsa improvement from the original
Wow. This is really helpful. I'll indeed look more into lineweight. She has a loose grip on the rifle because she's waiting. This pose is from an art book. Indeed everything in the wind should be blowing. I forgot that.
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