The Eclipse

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The Eclipse

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The Eclipse aka Johnathan Marx is a comic artist for a big company and he finds out he is a decendant of a god like man known as the great Telekies one of the founders of the Almighty superhero organization thats been around since Ancient Greece
Powers: Manipulation of Dark and Light Energy, Telekinesis, Flight, Strength, and Durability


why those he reminds me of dead-pool? and if he is a god why those he need to where a mask!? also why would he have only so little powers? why would he have both light and dark energy? this character has no moral agendas. he just a character whom you thought he be cool as a "superhero or what not" this is not the way to make a good solid character that stands out to your audiences, who ever they might be. when creating a character you must do it as if he was your perfect baby don't give a "cool not original look" patch it up with some powers that are meant more for moral men, than a god!. you have to start over from scratch and look in to the smaller detail possible, examine this character all the way, ask yourself those basic question that i ask and keep asking more and more then your mind will eventually give you answers you need to complete the character main profile this could take months of work or years, not! 2 days. think of Dr.Frankenstein when he was creating his monster. think of being in a lab where you have all these tools to play with, use them to create your true characters experiment around feel your characters out, be ambitious, use chemical X if you have to a.k.a <mixing everything to create something ELSE!>. this character is not your true character, this is something else you saw someone else do and decide to do the same thing only change it up. your doing the same things marvel and Dc Comics do which is just no fun anymore they don't know what there doing anymore just look at how they mess up superman by making him a god. on his home planet he was a moral men or child he was just a regular joe and then because he got his powers from landing on earth he just becomes a god! is that right! superman will not last long if they continue it like this. if mickey mouse can be taken down then the same could happen to him or any other comic franchises out there if they don't shape up.

well i don't think i have to review the rest of your stuff seeing as they will all be more or less the same basic idea and or structures, I hope this helps out see ya.

blackdragon24 responds:

I didnt say he was a god I said he was a descendant of a GODLIKE MAN and thank you for the review i'll take your advice

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May 4, 2013 | 9:19 PM EDT
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