we'll that was depperesing...
Had that happen. Devastating.
Like a sledgehammer to the chest, this one hits hard. I think that the way that you portrayed this was kind of snappy and even with the buildup of the first part, shown earlier, it doesn't quite make a comic book for me. What about adding some flashbacks in there? The story of the better times, under the tree, as Hol alluded to earlier in the piece?
72 hours to create this is pretty spectacular though and it only goes to show just how capable you are as a comic book artist. The line work for the rain really does put one hell of a degree of shade on the piece and the way that you portrayed it throughout could make this a contest winner. I certainly hope that you place, because it's bloody brilliant.
I'm looking forward to seeing some of your other comic creations, because I'd really like to see what else you can come up with. Perhaps getting together with a writer could help to produce stuff, because usually two heads are better than one. Not that your story writing is substandard, but I think it could have benefited from being a little longer, though this may have been held back by the constraints of the competition itself.
As with the first part, making the comic look like a full spread of page 1 on the left and 2 on the right would have helped - just something to make it look more like a comic book and to not have to scroll too far down the page, to view it all.
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I agree with Swagson, there was definetly tension between reading the 2 sets. The writing was particularly good. Easy flow of conversation, and it didn't sound forced or bullshitty. Really excellent work!
this was really good. but some times the your anatomy didnt stay constant but besides that it was a nice comic. would you mind pming me the program you used for this
I used Manga Studio EX 4.
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