Wow, this stuff is deep. Considering the wait that you've put us through for your other comic, this one is quite dark and mysterious, so I love the way that it starts to build to something. A little spark of romance between the characters, but will it all work out? I can't tell for the moment, but I'd like to carry on reading, to find out a little more.
Talking about the "watery line" in the rain, the hyphen looks like an underscore, so I'd change that, so that people can see it properly. That's probably the only issue I have with the drawing side of things, because it's so well written and drawn, if I'm honest. Perhaps it could use a splash of colour, but with the rain, there is no rainbow, so therefore no colour. Perhaps when the rain stops, there will be colour?
I'd quite like you to abut one page to another, so that it looks like a proper comic book, as you scroll down - you can get the piece into five spreads, so that people don't have to scroll as much, plus if there's something massive going on in the comic later on, you can take up a whole two page spread, to maximise the impact of it.
Good work, keep it up!
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