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ehh its ok
needs sound! and thats it
sound and vioces would make this very good hope the next one will have them.
Your timing and drawing abilities are both impecable. I really admire how good your stick characters look when they move. I also like how you give your audience enough time to read the sub-titles during the action sequences.
I'm curious to know why you did not include sound in this movie? Are you waiting till you find proper voice actors and background musics to fit perfectly with your ideas? Or did you just decide to keep everything silent? Either way, I am able to understand everything very clearly in this flashwork, without any music or sound effects.
Your story is both very engaging and written very well. I find that all your main characters are made distinct from one another, by their dialogue and physical features. That is a mark of a pretty good writer, and I commend your efforts on this story.
All I can suggest is that you fill in your audience on why Bu killed his father and why Ju had a reason to kill Bu before the father's murder. I say this because I find that you're not telling the audience everything they need to know, so they can understand the motiviation driving Ju and Bu to fight one another.
Overall I like where this is going and I look forwards to part B
Stop trying to be trendy. You can animate damned well, and you spend enough time on your stick figures to flesh them out, with all the shading and whatnot. Your so close, yet so far from the mark. Spend more time on the characters...flesh out your sticks frame by frame...you've proven you have enough talent to do so. Oh, and try to put a little originality in your plot...if your going to rip off akira, dont do it so obviously (wakes up in lab, sees test subject, lab is compromised of 80% corridors). Its cool and all, but when its not all yours, it's kind of sad...you have so much potential
DUDE!!!!!!! I LOVE YOUR MOVIE SO MUCH
Everyone is complaining about the sound. Dude i dont know why but i added some music to your movie and some vocies. you dont have an emila address so thats why i put it on the portal again. so you could see it and leave your email. you deserve a better score then what you got. you dont have to but if you want email me at firstname.lastname@example.org ok. ill send you the FLA. so you can have the music and stuff, then ill delete the other onie off my anem and put something else like a music video or something. ok. heres the link and i dont wanna make you angry ok. i just think you deserve a better score and if you have sound with some voices youll get higher and people wont complain. i dont know why people cant add music to it like i did when i first watched it.
This needs sound. Badly. Even if it were just music that fit the mood. Everything else was great.
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