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A story that i wrote in school, i liked it, so its being turned into a flash.
Wasn't the greatest thing ever made, but it looks like your series has promise, and I'll check it out.
It was short but set up the story well.Good job.
If I weren't in such a good mood, I'd thrash the movie. Oh wait..it isn't a movie.
It looks like it Might be cool
The Plot looks a bit questionable but if you pull it off I think it will be a good movie.
I must say, you've piqued my interest in your story. The idea is unique, in a way. Great authors have written books about societies with no emotion or individuality, but not in a way like this. I'm looking forward to seeing the story unfold.
I really only have a few comments:
First, the music in the beginning was a little loud and discordant. I understand you wanted to create the idea of chaos, but try it with a little less volume. Also might wanna make a few more explosions on the planet to show its destruction; one little bubble in the northeastern hemisphere doesn't really convey much.
Second, your rocket was a little uninventive. This is very cosmetic and trivial, but I think it'd be cool if it were a little more snazzy. Just an opinion.
Third, and biggest: you shouldn't submit previews. If you want, make it more like a prologue. Add a little more of your story to it, take out the "coming soon," and title it as a chapter prologue. It sounds really simple and stupid, but change things like that and people won't get mad at it. Well...at least I dont THINK they will.
Anywho, I'm looking forward to your story! Your graphics and idea seem very solid; stick with 'em!
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