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This is my first flash (any information on what I should improve would be helpful)
Also the loading page is NOT the flash Fun Wang (but is funny nonetheless)
...for your first flash, it is good.
You need to improve the sound/voices... This would be the most important item I saw as flawed.
The graphics and animation will come with time and training...
You got the humor, the ideas (i.e. SPC) and just need to work on the sounds...
On other scores, they are not bad:
0 for Interactivity is just because there'e no interaction.
4 on violence is just because there are so much more violence out there that yours fade into less violent type :)
Hope this is helpfull.
Keep them coming.The only way to get better is by making more :)
Although i was marginally amused by your all out frontal assault on the last guy to review this, i was not impressed by the actual movie. I think some background music could have helped the sound and maybe a look over the script to make the whole thing a bit more fluid.
I hope I dont get attacked as well...
yo Highwayman Svlad Cjelli do you know how gay that makes you sound putting stuff about masterbating a donky an sick shit like that seeing that your the one talking about dick's you must be the one who likes it up the rump its people like you that make newgrounds a non cool place an maby if you could make some flash movies that were actualy good you might have got a good rateing from me but it was nothing but shit im not gonna waste any more of my time on your sorry good for nothing ass
DUDE!!!! Yo Bilbow do you know how little I actually care about what the fuck you have to say, but then again its not like I can under stand half of the shit you've said... but I can however understand why you're going to be a welder and not an English teacher or a writer. With witty remarks like "your the one talking about dick's you must be the one who likes it up the rump", I'm left speechless, not only did I not realize that dicks had possession over the sentence fragment "you must be the one who likes it up the rump", but I also didn't realize that you had such a stunning, mindboggling grasp of Kentucky Logic. Which apparently states that if I talk about it I must mean I like it in my "rump", well you must talk about your family a whole lot, for obvious reasons that maybe even you could pick up on. I'm sure thats giving you too much credit though since you're an ignorant pathetic pretentious douche bag, who only actually picks up on relatives, did you get that one or are these play on words still aluding you, allusive like the dildo your father crammed into your colon a week ago never to be seen again... But Seriously man that insult about me liking "rump" hurt, almost as much as my cock after shoving it up your mothers asshole with only the blood from her rotting dilapidated hick colon to lubricate it.
I think I've said enough though, I'll let you read this, re-read it, and then after a while, of you blankly staring at it, hopefully you'll began to realize that you infact can't read. Since you can't, I guess that means I could call you a Dick Sucking Child Molester and you wouldn't even know it, or a Backwoods, Hay Slinging, Pig Raping, Family Member Fucking, Ozark Dwelling Hick Choad.
For a first flash this is pretty good,my first flash was 10 times as bad.Ok,things to improve:
-Practice and get better,
-Get better after youve practiced,
-When your better become the best.
-Then submit movies that are a lot better then this!
why would you make something as crap and dumb as that.
Why would you write a review as completely ignorant as that. Not only do you have total disreguard for the English language, but you fail to even give one solitary detail or evidence to prove your point or to advance your arguement. You are a pathetic human being and a deplorable pile of crap excreted from the asshole of the collective decay of western society
A short film about a park bench
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