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Just a cartoon i put together. Check it out.
That sucked balls!
That Was Just stupid and the screen shifted so you couldn't see it all.
Things to improve on
I'm just learning flash, so there's no way I'm mocking you. Just trying to help you know what to work on.
A. Lots of the words go off the screen. A little hard to read.
B. The movie is very slow. It's a decent concept, but to roll with it, you'll need a quicker plot and snappier dialogue.
C. Don't worry so much about artwork yet. I would give a beautifully animated piece of crap a zero long before a trashy looking movie that made me laugh.
D. Don't give up. I'm sure you can make some really funny stuff. If you ever want some encouragement, watch the movie entitled, "Things That Piss Me Off." It makes your movie look like it was made by Leonardo DaVinci, Stan Lee, and Fellini. I seem to have a personal vendetta against "Things That Piss Me Off," don't I? I probably do. I'm going to go give it another 0. You should, too.
I'm giving your film a 2, which should be enough to keep it alive for a whle.
Make it better.
Next time put some music in it or something... and like draw stuff just a little better with more detail, well actually alot better. Not to be mean or dissing or nothin but this kinda sucked. Flash animations take time.
never make anything again that was horrible
I didn't like it
I'm sorry I just didn't like this.
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