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1 star for the exclusive SU content.
3 stars for the animation, I'm a layman and I don't know anything about making flash, but I do feel there is room for improvement. Love the little touch you added to the blue Pearl Sapphire post climax animation.
Thank you for the awesome content.
I'm going to go with a rock solid 3-star rating here.
You've got a complex project, so making sure the buttons all work is a job... Too much for some to actually make sure they even do anything, so you're definitely above dead-average there... :o)
Going to point out "um... sound"... I know it's a commission, so if it was requested "silent", consider it understood. I won't beat the drum... just to remind that audio is important.
Completely unrealistic, and the animation didn't try to be particularly polished... Meh... I'm guessing that was part of your style and part of the point of this thing. Cartoons (even porn) are cartoons because we (artists and audience alike) don't have to submit to the rules and laws of reality... Let there be fantasy (especially when commissioned)... So don't sweat it.
It's actually done pretty well from what I could tell. What little "wonkiness" there might've been could be a frame rate thing, and could be between upload, stream, and my connection... Everything seemed as smooth as intended and nothing was distractingly out of whack.
You also attended details, particularly noteworthy in cumshots, the subtle throbbing of a male orgasm isn't always appreciably executed. You managed to do it well without being overtly fixated on it. It simply is what it is... good job.
You're definitely getting there... So don't forget to breathe, relax, and keep on keeping on... :o)
It's pretty good.
It's a bit rickety. But otherwise loops pretty ok. Had more scenes than I expected :P
Did really like the small details like the reach around in one of the scenes.
You should probably mention that it includes hyper genderswaps btw. (I know they can shapeshift, that still doesn't sweep the fact under the rug xD)
Also: Do know I rate stuff based on the actual 1-10 scale. Where a 2,5 means it's "completely average+ok." So my score for this is "A bit below average, but still pretty good.". I do like a lot of parts in it. It's just a bit unpolished. But keep up the work. You are getting there ^^
And could really do with some description in the author comments of what it contains. Like, I thought it might have contained something lesbian based on the fandom and title, but turns out it didn't :P
A starving village ask a water spirit to help them.
Strawberry clock forgets his ticket on the train but maybe he'll be ok
a clock day story
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