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This is an animation based on a comic strip series I made several years ago.
It's about a young couple dealing wiith everyday issues just as you would in real life.. almost!
Thanks to the people behind the voices in this episode:
Ian Pabito - http://communistmormon.newgrounds.com/
Jenni Nexus - http://jenninexus.newgrounds.com/
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Thanks to NCS and ZAZAs with "Be Together".
Special thanks to my family and friends.
I'm biased, but I love it and find the project endearing! :-) <3
Thank you, jenninexus.
It's a privilege to work with you and to have you on board :)
The art style is dope but the joke is not nearly funny enough to carry the cartoon. It's only a couple seconds long and the whole thing is riding on that joke being funny and it's not that good.
Not trying to be mean, your character and background design is good you just need better writing.
Thank you for your feedback. It helps me to see things in a different way than before.
I agree that the animation might be too short and because of that it don't slam the punchline well enough.
But this animation is based on a comic strip with 3-4 panels and what I've tried to do is to make those panels come alive through animation without too much changes and work. I was trying to maintain the the same progression in the animation as in the comic strip. Maybe it doesn't work as well as I hoped for and I'll really appreciate it if others too would like to comment on this. I will however keep this in mind for future episodes and experiment with it a little more.
Thanks again for your feeback.
Enjoy your day.
1. More colors. 2. Outro is too long. 3. Make larger animations.
1. Smooth Animation. 2. Good Voice acting. 3. Funny
Thanks for your feedback, BLaacK.
The idea is to keep it b/w but I do somehow agree with you that maybe I should use more colors. I'll try it out and see how it'll work.
By larger animations I assume you mean more gestures, etc.?
I'll downsize the outro as it actually seem to be longer than the animation...
Thanks again for your constructive feedback.
Pilot for my new show!
A story about a worm, a beetle and a very hungry bird…
New video for you to watch, while we wait for the next plague to happen...
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