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Orbisea: Episode 1 (New and old friends)
Solias the lone guarian of his home village sets off on a quest looking for an old friend and runs into some trouble along the way.
Adobe After Effects, Gimp 2, Adobe Animate, Adobe Premiere Pro CC
You guys have no idea the hassel I went through to get this thing out sorry about the wait hope you enjoy!
All Characters and music are orignal properties of Xaal Carlson
Ever wonder why so many cartoons use simple designs, while most comics use realistic and very detailed art styles? Because what works as a still doesn't look very aesthetically pleasing in animated form, and this is a perfect example of that.
It's obvious you were trying to go for an anime style, but doing that as a solo animator is probably not the best idea since it sacrifices animation quality. Hell, it sacrifices the animation quality of PROFESSIONAL productions, just imagine the amount of effort it would require from one single dude. The one good example of an anime-styled project made by one dude I can think of took around 4 years to complete, and that was a short 5~ minute animation. That said, there WERE some nicely done moments in this, like the action scene with the archer and the girl, and the swordmanship scenes were generally decent (even if there were a few too many side smiles).
Since I don't know where else to fit this, I'll just include it here: The colors are too bright. There's too much contrast between them, so you should either lower their saturation or find color that work better with the character designs. The former would be easier, the latter would be preferable.
Let's move on to another area, sound direction. It is probably a good idea that you learn how to balance audio levels, The music is way too loud in places ("They're over there...makes ♪DANANANANANA DANANANANA DANANANANA♪" "What happened to keeping a low profile? I know, I♪DANANANANA DANANANANA DANANANANA♪"). I wish I could comment on the voice acting, but the music was too damn loud most of the time.
The writing was pretty good in the beginning, but then it became way too cliche'd as the video went on ("Your worst nightmare!" "You can't fire me, I quit!". And of course, "If you do thing, I'll do thing! "...AHAHAHA").
tl;dr: Simplify the character designs if you really are planning to turn this into a series. Learn to balance audio levels, and remember that moving lip flaps does not really count as animation (at least make them move their jaws).
And of course, sorry if I seem too harsh! I'd give you a 3, but Pico's comment on the 2 describe my general feelings on the video, but I also enjoyed it quite a bit, so I think a 2.5 is a rather fitting score.
harsh... But I appreciate your critque and most of the stuff in this animation was created around six months ago so I can gaurantee alot of improvement in future episodes. as for the bright colors and complex designs it really more of a style thing as for the mouth movements and what not I get that it can be rather annoying if only the characters mouths move but its done out of practicality and there are gestures and the like thrown in. I really cant think of anyone including simpler animators who make large scale 10 minute animations where they dont occasionally just use lip flapping or slide screens. Also the slight quality decrease in dialouge sequences gives me the ability to do far far better action sequences as I have more time for them. Its not like I cant just scrap story and do complex fancy action scenes but i personally feel that theres more to it than that. Im also gonna make sure I fix the audio quality this was my 2nd time ever working with voice actors and some people recorded to far away from the mic not to mention im not really experinced with sound design but thats the not point. Point is I appericiate your advise but I dont think my style lowers the quality of the episode in the least and I dont really feel that its a valid reason to give me a low score when people get 5 stars for black and white stick men with little to no dialogue.
The beginning was too slow, but nice animation and interesting angles in the middle.
I was already hovering over ``Not bad, in fact... I like it'' when I saw the opening scene, but I went to ``Woot'' when I saw the lens-flare. Great job.
The animation is pretty good, the only thing I can offer on this is to spend more time creating additional frames for a smoother and fluid experience.
I thoroughly enjoyed the voice work. The music score fit the scenes pretty well as well. You have a talent for direction. My only advice is to look up audio tutorials in order to make the sounds and voices all feel as though they are in the same universe; they are all over the place. Some sounded like they were in an empty room far from the mic, others as though the mic was in their throat.
Overall a fun time and a fun story. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks a million :D And yep Im gonna be trying to improve my sound and dialogue quality I ended up having to rush alot of the sound effects due some technical issues and a tight schedule. Glad you enjoyed it.
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