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It may confused you there more to it but please cuz i can't make smooth but understand story, pay no attention but the story more
I'll give you credit for the animation because it was pretty legit for the most part, but this has problems:
1. Please learn to stretch out your backgrounds. There were too many white edges being exposed here. Even a black edge in one part?
2. If you're going to use text, please learn to give it extra time for people to read. A lot of it goes by way too fast, so nobody can read it.
3. I strongly recommend Swivel so that your animation is not on loop. It's a free program, so it should be no problem to get.
Also this is just a nitpick, but please learn how to word out your sentences in your Author Comments section. I'm usually not much of a grammar nazi, but half of it I could barely even understand. It doesn't have to be perfect, it just needs to be understandable.
Now don't think I'm hating on you. I'm only giving out constructive criticism. And I hope you take my advice and try to improve in the future. And I hope you do. Good luck!
Messy, unoriginal and not worth much of a vote.
oh come on
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