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Yes, this has been designed to be short.
For credits and other info, check the original version on YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CDyv7asUgVU
There are pros and cons with this submission. The animation and the artwork is pretty good and creative. Even the music is really good too. However, if you're going to use text instead of voice acting, at least make the words stay on screen a couple seconds longer. Some of the dialogue went by too fast. Also try to work on your grammar because some of it was a bit off. For what it is, the video is pretty good. Keep up the good work!
Well, thank you for the feedback. I'm not a native English speaker, so I can't make all the characters sound like they are born in other place, because in that case they would not speak English. And same goes about my grammar, but hey, you have been REALLY helpful because... I forgot about it. I will be careful about it, but now I realize that I have been very stupid. I make mistakes very often, but at least in a video I should correct them. And about the dialogue, for some reason, before publishing it, I said it's too long on the screen and I've deleted 25% of every line time. Thank you. You have been way more helpful than you thought you are.
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