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A story about a ghost named Glove and a human girl.
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Another great short.
I think there were issues with the sound quality.
The mix needs to be worked on, atm it is muddy, everything mashing together nothing in it's own space. The music/sfx themselves were well timed and appropriate just levels were poor.
With out knowing where the actor/writer comes from it sounds like English is not their first language. It removes me from the story as things sound a little clumsy.
Writing and acting in your native tongue with the use subtitles will leave you with a more immersive/ emotionally connective short.
If the artist teamed up with a more refined writer and good audio team some really brilliant work could be produced.
The art was fantastic again such amazing vision i really enjoyed it. I thought the animations were a little rough but i appreciate the style and enjoyed it thoroughly.
I really think there is a lot of potential in the style and can't wait to see it develop!
I agree with you at almost every point! :)
Maybe i should do the next one in swedish.
Thanks alot for watching! Really appreciate your critisism!
"The little girl is scared for her life." Show don't tell. The narration should be a bit wittier in terms of humor if that's what you're going for. The imagery in the last 50 seconds of this video comes off with too much horror elements that feel out of place for what's supposed to be a comedy.
It would also help if you had an option for subtitles as well. Your voice is clear but sound effects are just as loud. If you want good reference material for witty narration with (somewhat) serious story try the game Thomas Was Alone (Or look up a walkthrough). I think it would help give you an idea of balancing the humor and serious moments of your story. You have to build up to one aspect or the other, that's pacing at its finest.
No it's not only a comedy. I never make movies like that :)
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