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This is the Pilot Episode of Stumps Field. Mateur content, and viewer discretion is greatly advised. Hope you guys enjoy the film.
Not bad, I like the humor. good jokes. My suggestion would be to add some real sound effects, I get some from freesound.org , you can also get some sound effects and music from freepd.com .
Also, the eyes not moving is distracting in a weird way. Facial movement during dialog will draw the eye to the character, so the viewer will not be distracted by other movement on the screen. This goes the same if you add a tongue for "L" syllables, and scrunch the bottom lip for "F" syllables. In this style you could maybe bend the bottom jaw to do that.
The space ship is awesome, good work there. and keep it up, i liked it.
hope i was of some help.
Hey thanks Eric. Its good feedback. Ill have to take that into consideration. It is kind of awkward how the eyes never blink. I made them to appear to be puppets. I also made the cartoon VERY tame, as it is the pilot episode. Its going to get pretty narly soon. Thanks for watching man.
The style of the animation is nothing to fault but I did notice small details that broke my illusion.
1- When you shake a camera, make sure the whole video shakes, including the stars and planets.
2- The space ship and the Chairs need better archs of motion. Too linear.
3- Mind your spacing. Everything was evenly spaced and it because noticeable.
I say watch Terry Gilliam. He is the person you study and you will be GOLDEN! He is the guy who made the Cut out animation of Monty Python and the Holy Grail.
Otherwise, I respect the shock humor you are reaching for. I say focus on those things and you will have a better product. I hope the best for you. Good hunting!
Hey thank you pimpi,. Thanks for the advice. I'm gonna have to take a closer look at some of those issues.
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