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DON'T TRY THE LINK IT'S FAKE AS HELL.
But hell isn't fake.
*Cue theme song for The X Files.*
This was made for the Danimations Freedom Collab: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kCpXQ7t91m0
You created an original skit using your own characters and are utilizing the voice talents of either one actor or two.
Each character was given an entirely distinct suitable for the character designs.
One of the voices sounded like a child's voice; However, the character design seemed to be tailor designed.
A lot of your characters look very young and a youthful voice is not out of place.
I seen movies produced by younger kids that gave kid voices to adult characters.
It didn't work and made the overall movie increasingly amateurish.
You made certain that the voices fit together with your designs and managed to avoid a very common mistake.
I will assume you are a flash animator under the age of 20 and asked friends to do voices.
You seem to show a lot of promise and have started creating flash from a young age.
Most other animators on this site start in their late teens or adult years.
You already got a head start against your future rivals.
The movie itself would be something that I would consider to be average standard.
The fake PSA is a cliched comedy devise; However, the movie does have a good sense of humor.
The drawings on the characters use the standard black outline.
You can try experimenting with other outline colors to create different looks.
The backgrounds seemed to use different colored outlines and have shown more experimentation.
The skies in the background were clear.
Clear skies eliminates the work load of needing to create constantly moving clouds.
A moving cloud background can be creating using frame by frame or motion tweens.
I assume that you already knew this because you already display previous experience with animation creation.
The background on the tomb stone did have clouds; However clear skies would have worked here too.
Make those clouds in the background move to farther enhance visual elements of your movie.
The sky itself could have been created by using the gradient feature of flash.
Creating your own gradients is a simple way for creating more polished skies.
You can also use a mixture of solid colors and really experiment on different animation tactics.
The beauty of drawing the sky is that it can not be done incorrectly.
The sky is constantly moving and changing.
You can easily get all kinds of inspiration by observing the actual sky itself.
I seen the sky in white colors, red colors, brown, dark brown, black and different types of clouds.
You can do simple tweaks to create better skies for adding an extra element of polish.
The shadows worked well in the second shot after the robot was introduced at the start.
The shadows on the kid had clear direction; However, a darker shade on the kid's hair would have been more effective.
The shadow on the kid's hair was lighter than the original color and barely noticeable without inspection.
That shade of blue on the hair is more suitable for light rather than shadow.
The buildings in the background would cast their own shadows depending on the direction of the sun.
The windows on the one building near the kid would act as mirrors.
The backgrounds on the first shot were effective and filled with plenty of gags.
The windows on those stores could be enhanced as well by showing part of the inside.
You might see a fridge, shelves, counters and other details often seen in store windows.
You can also include signs on the doors that post store hours.
You can improve upon these details with both practice and increased observation.
A robot can be drawn in any fashion since it's an object that doesn't physically exist in reality.
You can basically work from your imagination and draw different types of robots without reference material.
I hope to have provided a detailed review for farther enhancement of future submissions.
Keep pumping those movies out.
You, my man, have earned a follower.
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