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This is my second animation. I actually started this months ago but was delayed by quite a lot of things. Very happy to finally finish it.
In my mind it is a slight improvement from the first but let me know what you guys think.
Thanks for watching!
Very competent work, attractive characters and voices, decent, reality based plot :) There's a lot to be proud of here! The jokes were poilte an dwell served, though a few of the extended scenes without dialog, might've been stretched a bit too far - action can be inserted into scenes, even when it's a calm, reflective time... like eating a sandwich while walking/waiting (eg: Jayne from Firefly)
(lol, not a review) Though to make it on NG (just like anywhere), it takes a bit of schmoozing every time you log in, to be noticed and appreciated for what you do. Comment in the Forums, and in reviews of things you've seen/heard/played here, talk to other animators about their technique... NG is much cosier than YouTube, not about the numbers here, but the submissions, and the people behind them.
Backgrounds that is all...
This is pretty good for your first animation but theres two things you could do too make your animation insanely better. I would work on how your characters face the audience. You always have a full frontal position for your characters and I would add more poses where they're 3/4s position or even profile. Like when two characters are on screen speaking to each other you should turn their bodies inward.
The second thing that I would work on is movement. Your characters tend to be pretty stiff and too contained. By the looks of it most/possibly all of your stuff is tweened when it moves. I would try hand drawing more major movements but you can keep tweening on minor movements. Like when the girl was drawing in the classroom that was a pretty good use of tweening since it was a really minor movement.
Overall I do like the animation and other than the things I mentioned here its great stuff! I hope to see more of your stuff around here :D
It's ok. The cartoon doesn't have enough happening visually to justify its slow pace. The characters are all flat-looking, so some shadow might help it substantially. The writing is fine; it's good to see some situational comedy on newgrounds.
Pilot for my new show!
A story about a worm, a beetle and a very hungry bird…
New video for you to watch, while we wait for the next plague to happen...
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