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A father trying to reconnect with his daughter
Perfect music for this. Maybe being a father myself Is why I can understand his feelings, but either way, I wont lie... I cried. You didn't have voice actors, its not the best art, its not the best animation... but that's ok because you didn't need it. This did something most flashes nowadays can't do and that's reach me at an emotional level. Well done, well done indeed.
I thought it looked good, and the style is simplistic and gets the point across well. Two things I would recommend:
1. A new grounds preloader (Ya know the things where you click 'PLAY' right before)
2. Spell checking (I noticed some spelling errors, which is a simple mistake, but just try fixing it before you upload ;D)
Also text is not the BEST way to go when telling a story in an animation, but its still okay. If you can (completely optional) try voice acting or just try going with something silent, but still tells a story.
Hope this helped in some way!
Great story, only you should work more on the design and colors ecenarios such textures Might try again, good luck.
wow awesome i can fell what the father fell is just awesome
need to improve. A lot.
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