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Well I've finished a little Teaser Trailer based off my spirte series i'm working on this is a short teaser on what my series is about.
This is a Kingdom Hearts Crossover with Mario characters brought into the mix hope you guys enjoy :)
Looks like it will be a fun series to watch. Can't wait to see you mesh these characters and concepts together
I'd say that, as trailers go, this wasn't bad overall. The music and sound effects were very good, and I litterally can't complain about that.
In fact, I really don't have very many complaints that I can level against this, as it's only a preview.
However, I will say the animation could use some work. It's not as smooth as it should be, and looks downright sloppy at times- especially when Sora was attacking Darkside (I actually don't remember that Heartless' name, so please correct me if I'm wrong).
Aside from that, I'm getting a feeling that you may want to work on your writing. I saw that you had random capitalization on your sentences ("Sora Don't change"), as well as a few other grammatical errors. All of that could be ironed out by just having someone proofread the script for you before you add it in. You might not get everything, but at least the dialogue will look a little more correct and proper.
All that aside, this is an interesting concept. You don't see a whole lot of KH sprite movies, or crossovers on Newgrounds. I look forward to seeing the first episode.
I hope my review has helped you, and I wish you a good day.
Thank you for the nice feedback, I found your advice very helpful, and thanks so much much for pointing out that writing fault that was from the game I think I meant to write "Sora, don't ever change." that completely went over my head I guess I got so excited that I didn't look back (Sorry I don't have the best grammar :P) as for the animation guilty as charged I probably should've looked at it more before uploading this some animators say you shouldn't analyze too much what you're doing and just sort of go for it which I did but I guess I should've done that more with the writing and the animation sorry about that I'm still learning, and i'm trying my best to improve I'm still learning, but anyway thanks again. (Btw don't worry about the name of the heartless your right that's it's name.) I'll keep you guys posted on this thanks for watching.
Really cool. Seems like this will be a good series.
this has the potential to be about as epic as super mario brothers Z, I look forward to seeing how this progresses, a word of advice, dont rush, and please, do not lose your muse either, I look forward to seeing the first episode when its complete
Thanks man glad you enjoyed this little teaser ;) SMBZ was huge influence for me and I really enjoyed Alvin's work in the past, but I wanted to try something much like super mario brothers z, but do it with two games I really enjoyed and try to shake things up a bit in the sprite community. It will be my first attempt with a video ever, but don't worry I'm taking as much time as possible with this first episode I'll do my best to hide the fact that it's my first animated video. I've been working on this since late 2012 but sadly this past new years eve I guess what happened was i imported all the sprites with really long names and flash couldn't handle it so I had to actually use a flash drive to retrieve the file and rename everything from my folder and do it over :P but making a lot of good process a good chunk of it's finished and i've been watching it several times. I'm working on the climax right now and I hope you enjoy it from beginning middle to end. Thanks again :)
Pilot for my new show!
A story about a worm, a beetle and a very hungry bird…
New video for you to watch, while we wait for the next plague to happen...
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