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Nov 6, 2013 | 1:19 PM EST
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Somewhere in the distant future, a teleportation device to another dimension has been invented. Our main protagonist , Eliana, has stolen the device. With the police hot in pursuit behind her , she entered an alley attempting to get away , only to end up in a dead end .Trapped with nowhere else to go, she was left with no other choice but to use the stolen device. She pushed the button ,closes her eyes and hopes for the best.....

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furyberserkfuryberserk

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

3 Problems with this as far as I can see.
1. After she did the butterfly twist, her right foot landed wrong on it's side, but that is negligable.
2. My real problem is that she gets shot at and dodges them over a fence, but when she lands she wastes time doing nothing and no one is pursuing her across the fence let alone shooting at the person who is clearly still there and is staying still.
3. I can tell she uses the suit to help her climb up the wall, but using the trash can kind of undermines the usefulness of the suit, making it look like anyone who can wall jump could have also done that just to get on the trashcan. If she did the flip right off the wall, it'd be better. Also seeing the suit go to her feet, you don't have to include it now, but it'd be cool to do something else with it in replace of the trash can like using the hand or the shield deflect bullets. I'm in no place to judge greatly, but that is something I'd like to see. Maybe too high expectations.

Everything else looks great. Just if you show something, don't let something it can clearly do be something others could do without, unless it has a reason. This is just my 2 cents.


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KiltedKodiakKiltedKodiak

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Awsome stuff! Best part, one of the guys with the flashlights-clearly checking out her tits...



SkylodaSkyloda

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Awesome can't wait till you get a full movie out :))



SonnyismeSonnyisme

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Well? what happened in the end?



GaronGaron

Rated 0 / 5 stars

only on thing, the uploader is the same author than create the original short?, because no merit in take the job of another one and make yours. i want to remember, the original short go out about 2012.
P.D: Sorry for my english