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Two chickens arguing at Bonko's barn.
The main problem with this animation is that it lacks any substance, there's just nothing I can rely on. I mean having no story is not a big problem, being random works in some cases, but even so you have to have some kind of organization. Throwing in a few chickens swearing just isn't enough.
Audio wise, it was terrible. I mean, the audio acting was fine I guess, but your microphone, holy crap! I'm just so glad I wasn't wearing headphones! Go buy a pop filter, you can find them very easily for quite cheap. It will prevent all of that noise in your final cut. That just completely ruined it for me.
The animation was childish. The drawings felt rushed and simply looked awful. I'm not saying it was so bad you couldn't watch it -- I've seen worse. However it just didn't have anything to stand out. Sometimes the style can work but only in some very specific cases, here it clearly isn't one of those. Try working in different styles and spending more time drawing things.
Even if I overlook the drawings (I mean, I certainly wouldn't be able to do any better :P), there was no effort in actually coloring it. It looks like you used to paint bucket on every shape in there and didn't even fix the filling errors like at the beginning.
In a whole, it just lacked... so much. The jokes are not funny. The art was poor. The audio quality was poor. The acting itself wasn't great either. On a whole, you've got something that feels empty. Imagine it like if you were going to eat a burger but after the first bite stop eating it because there is no sauce in it, making it extremely dry and painful to eat. That's what would describe my experience watching this.
Now, don't get me wrong. I have nothing against you and admire your effort. What I'm saying here is you should allow yourself some more time to practice more. I was terrible at making music before, and now I'm starting to get the hang of things! Same applies here. Try new things, and most importantly: learn from others! Watching other animations and trying to mimic them will only help you. Don't be afraid to make things a bit differently; jump in! Practice makes perfect.
I know this is a poor scored review, but I don't think it deserves much more. I believe you should practice more and experiment with other things!
That said good luck, I wish you all the best for your future animations! :)
Sorry, I didn't personally find this funny. Animals swearing and making sexual references isn't enough to make me laugh. You should also invest in a pop filter for your microphone if you plan on making more stuff. I can tell that you at least tried with how it looks, so that's just a case of practicing more.
A short film about a park bench
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