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this my first animation i ever finished but i hope you like it
i know there is no joke and the story isnt so good but i couldnt come up anything and i really wanted to make something
i also started on youtube -http://www.youtube.com/u ser/Samnosca
Now It was decent for a first anime and i could feel for the dude and that situation.
For a first story submission, it was decent. The expressions told the dry humor well but the artwork could be cleaned up a little.
I like the animation style (mainly because it vaguely reminds me of some fan-made Vocaloid animations), but it would have been a lot better if you got voice actors to do the dilogue of the main characters instead of using body language, and also possibly throw in a song or two. The cafe wasn't really a defined building, either, and that'd be an easy fix. I hope you revisit this animation, updating it with the improvements I listed. It would probably get a somewhat higher rating.
Not bad for a dirst time. And you don't have to apologize for a lack of story or joke. It is a very recognizable situation for most guys, which you depicted really well. Sure, animation and sound effects could be better, but the most important thing to me is telling a story (or a really good joke ;) ) You conveyed the message by just using sounds and animation. That is a quality any good animator should have. The animation and sound skills will develop automatically with practice. Good job!
good but the sound was not clear
thanks for the advice:)
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