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Check out what the Chick-Fil-A Gang has been up to lately since September to November! Tomorrow might and maybe be another C&C.
My brain......!!! I used to be a cow for Chick-Fil-A awhile back :x
I guess it's strange for me to review this since I did the animation in this but whatever, I'll just critique the parts you did and the overall concept of this series.
I will start by critiquing the intro. First of all, I dislike the way you zoomed in on each of those backgrounds. It was done very poorly because you're generally supposed to zoom out on these kinds of shots. The zoom-ins are very close to the point that they are uncomfortable and you can see the mistakes with the line quality.
Second of all, you don't have good handwriting. I can't really offer you any advice here except that if you have bad handwriting, you may want to use text. Also, the red 2012 shouldn't be over the sky and the grass. It should either be on the sky or on the grass, for coloring reasons.
Lastly, the up-and-down motion of the Cow Wagon looks too jittery. The antidote to this is to not have so much movement, even if it's a moving vehicle.
I can see you were trying to go with the whole "misspelled words" style of the series with "Okay letz juzt start already!" but that just looked awkward because you could still make out most of the words and "juzt" just sounds weird.
I noticed you slashed out "chicks" and wrote "groceries." I'm sorry, I didn't realize you were a Puritan.
The shot with Cow running and Chicken getting hit by a tree was very well done. Good job on that.
I like most of your additions to the parts I made. The sound effects made it 1000% better and your new animation additions make it better than it was before.
I see that you put all of the music credits in the side. Good job, but one thing - the Willie D Intro was removed by Willie D because it wasn't his and he was told that he should remove it before he loses any privileges.
I loved the Febreeze episode.
La Linea was good. Good echo effect on the real CFAC's voice.
In conclusion, no uncomfortable zooms, no colors that intrude on the viewer's aesthetic senses, no useless censoring and learn to respect your audience.
Feeling sorry for yourself doesn't get you anywhere...
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A short animation about Journey
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