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A Shootout begins for no reason.
Music by Kevin Macleod.
You definitely have a lot of potential here. Considering this is most likely one of your first few submissions (I haven't seen you on Newgrounds before), this is really a good job. I must criticize because I believe it will help you out. I am not really an animator myself, although I would love to be, so please excuse me if you thing I am being to harsh.
Firstly, I think you definitely could improve the atmosphere. Maybe take a look Xionic Madness to kind of understand where I'm getting at. It was a shootout, but I really didn't feel danger. Maybe the music choice, but I think the animation could have been faster paced. Once again, I understand you have not yet mastered this yet, but implementing the camera shakes during the fighting is something you should use in the future.
Another good thing is that sound effects could definitely be amplified. It adds tension or excitement. You could also improve on profile shots and distance conception.
Once again, I am in no way attempting to make you get down on yourself, this is merely constructive. I hope you strive to improve and make a name for yourself on Newgrounds!
Thanks for the in-depth and constructive review, friend! I checked out Xionic Madness and I can definitely see what you're saying, I do need to work on my pacing and my implementation of audio,. Although I did use some camera shakes, I probably need to make them more prominent.
Thanks for helping me out :)
interesting i personally think some context would help and the ending could be better
Yeah, I agree, but this was really just a small project to push my skills a little, to see if I could make a little action-oriented animation, but some context would improve it. I'll also try to improve my endings (maybe I should work backwards or something).
Thanks for the feedback friend :)
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