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a little boy goes into the kitchen for a delicious glass of delicious water when he's met by a surprise within a surprise, within a surprise. it's like some sort of Inception of surprises.
my second animation, based on a comic that my friend showed to me one day in an english class. hopefully an improvement over my last animation.
exapnd on it and flesh outthe drawing on the characters...thats all im saying with more stor next time :I
This has potential to be better.
The animation itself looks nice, the guy could look smoother if you took some time working to sculpt out the face and making it rounder. Same thing can be said for the hair. Spend more time and try to make it look more cartoonish rather than having spikes being there in the back. The kitchen and outside looked fine.
The sound effects used were nice. However, I feel there could have been more sounds such as the guy walking to get the glass of water then the sound of drinking the water. For the outside, you could use some natural outside sounds or a bit of wind.
As for the story, should be a bit longer. Saying this as even though it looks that the spider will eat the lion, it could just as easily be befriending it.
Overall, practice and you'll keep getting better.
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thank you for the review
you need to make it a little longer :)
I would also advice to actually make something happen. maybe the spider would eat the lion, maybe the lion would eat the spider?
I would say it is a nice start.
thanks for the review
the humor is subtle. the idea is that the boy is thinking something along the lines of "this is the strangest thing!" and then something even more strange happens. it's kind of like alternative comedy where it's not for everyone.
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