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Done in less than 48 hours for the movie jam, so at the moment, it's a little rushed and unpolished, but that's to be expected.
The people reviewing this who said that you needed to spend more than 48 hours on it are kind of missing the point, aren't they?
I give you four stars because I know how hard it is to make a flash movie this long in that short of a time. The stylistic choices worked most of the time, and most of the time, I could gather the story rather well.
Unfortunately, several individual things bog this movie down. When the style goes from intensely stylized (black silhouettes) to "realistic"? I groaned. To be completely fair, it looks... gross. That's my biggest issue; it was a very poor stylistic choice. Sticking entirely with the first style might have been better. Moreover, the story seemed very loose and casual to me, and not well thought out. Also, personal complaint that doesn't affect my review: whhhhaaaattt the fuuuccckkk with that ending???!
All in all, a nice jam with a few fatal flaws. Practice will get you very, very far C:
Ask, and thou shalt receive. You were the second person to call on the sillouhette thing. It was originally just because I was going for more realistic lighting than style, but having amended that now, I can see what you mean, it does look way better.
As for the story, it's already as tight as I can get it. I'm pretty comfortable with where it's at.
Looks like you should have spent more than 48 hours. The concept is pretty beautiful and deep, but the animation is pretty crappy sometimes. Then, I'll to my favs, and I really like it, but you should pull it out to make it look better.
I was intending to clean up some of the rougher parts this week.
Tried several times, but it kept freezing my computer. Couldn't gather much from what I saw. Sorry.
I don't know why this is... I'll try putting a blanket 'play();' over the whole animation..
**Edit** Done. Hopefully that'll keep it playing..
might need some fixing up with the ending j/s
Wow what an inept father, too pussy to take on the assholes that killed his wife and ends up drowning himself and his daughter. Should have at least sacrificed himself so his daughter can high-tail it out of there.
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