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Oh, it is not that much because my micrphone is broken. Nay!
THE END NO MAKE SENSE AND I DONT HER TO GOOD THE VOICE
Kind of nice flash, I noticed that the artowrk could use some more detail, subtitles if you may, and last but not least, a better microphone.
Nice try though, should redo and better results should come your way!
Thanks for the tips! I will try harder on my next submission.
the beginning was nice, but near the end i got lost.... at one part it looked as if her breast was out with very pink nipples... idk, maybe a tad but more work on the artwork.. and get your self a better mic... and redo it, i'm sure it will be alright... maybe you should make it a bit longer as well... it was kinda short..
I thought you review was very helpful. I will try and make some small corrections. Thanks for viewing and commenting.
Not bad, It feels under developed but not bad. I can solemnly agree with your creator comment about the audio, that was the biggest issue. Visual and style wise it felt very lacking and very dry. Otherwise though your concept and idea for the story is a bit two-sided. On one side it can fit very well for a comedy, on the other it might of been a little horror piece. Eitherway though you were decent my friend. I'm going to give you a 1 in a half out of 5. And a 1/5 in voting power. Keep practicing, creating and contributing on here. I hope you've enjoyed this review. Good day.
Very extensive review! I need to keep practicing, creating and contributing. Happy Halloween.
pretty good.....i liked it!!
I like you!!!
The story of a lazy kid and the people who live at his place. Sometimes stuff happens.
Be sure not to miss all the wild adventures happening at this school!
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