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I swear the sun does this to me every time i meet it
i found that to be kinda funny but it was so crappy XD
That was pretty funny.
That was completely random. And this very short flash film had a moral to this scenario. Wear plenty of sunblock or you will die! The duration was the only thing that got to me since it would of been interesting to have watched a long little flash film but I digress. The art style is very rough in design and also very bland and uninteresting in a sense. But the humor was the only thing that I could focus on and had grabbed my attention to it. I'm going to bestow upon you a 2/5 and a 2/5 in voting power. I hope you keep practicing, creating and contributing here. Good day.
Something tells me you're quite young. First of all, I'm not trying to be mean, just trying to help and I mean this in the nicest way possible.
The NG preloader doesn't need to fit the whole screen, just placing it in the middle of the screen normal size will look so much better.
This is clearly the work of a beginner and it has that beginner's charm to it. Unfortunately, that alone cannot save the quality of this flash.
The backgrounds look childish if I were to be completely honest. Scribbling a darker shade of green onto a lighter shade of green to make it look like grass is a good idea in theory but it doesn't necessarily translate well to the Flash canvas.
The character is very unpolished and it is obvious and apparent you don't actually *observe* cartoons, but rather, stitch them together using your erroneous notions of what you think a cartoon would look like.
The animation of the bird was very nice and smooth. I really liked it, it shows you have a basic understanding of how animating works, and that's good.
Some of the humor seemed a bit childish. This is not to detract from childish humor. People like Oney do childish humor very well. This is more of an "outdated joke, slapstick" sort of childish, and I don't think a lot of people will enjoy watching anything that is dated and kiddy-looking.
So good luck in your future animations, please consider this advice. You have potential.
Cheers man, i know this is a bit half assed but i wanted some feedback and i really like what you wrote.
This was ment to be something else and a bit more polished but when flash kept crashing i kind of just raged and uploaded this scrap looking for any form of advice.
I'm glad you liked the bird that was certainly my more proud moment of this. While I overall shouldn't have uploaded this and just made something actually worthy of being witnessed I'm still glad i did to get a perspective of whats good and just downright horrible.
Don't worry my next one will be much much better :)
A short film about a park bench
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