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This is the story After the Battle with Xicor...
A new enemy has come
Our heroes will Face their Hardest Task..
1.) Needs a "Skip" button for the intro.
2.) The animation really needs work. The action seems "generic" to me and feels pretty bland. I mean, all there really is just punching and kicking that enables "slow motion". I mean, come on, it takes way too long for Trunks to beat those Saibamen.
3.) Originality. I mean, I don't mind you making a DBZ series but why don't you try coming up with original ideas? Using fan made characters and not just character from the series. It's your series and do what you wish, but if you want your series to be popular try adding in what I suggested.
4.) Text reading. Everyone reads at a different space so you should have a "press to continue" sequence that allows people to read at their own pace. Having to sit there and wait for the test to go away gets quite irritating, ESPECIALLY since there's no voice acting.
So all in all, DECENT attempt at a series but it could be done better. What I did like though was the fact you used a V Cam and had some action.
needs a scene selection, and something to skip the long intro. i watched it and had to stop because i was going out, and pretty much had to start over
im sorry about tht ;'( i'll try to add a skip in it next time
its ok needs some work
Thanks this is only an Intro to the story :)
i will give you a 3 in story
Thank you :)
First off, love the fact that you have a load bar, not many makes those in the UJ section ;)
You got a nice concept to follow up on the DB series, but the intro was a bit to long for my taste, that said it feels like you are hitting the spirit of DB.
Keep it up ;)
Thank you ^.^ and yeaah the intro isn't the best :/ But i tried :D
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