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My first animation with sounds, and voices.
I want opinion about it.
To short. You have to work on your draw quality. Maybe in next animation use some plot?
The last animation I watched didn't have a replay button when I wanted to replay it, and this one doesn't have an ending when I want it to stop.
On the animation itself, the lip syncing is decent. Not perfect, but decent. To make it better, I'd take the sound file, see how long it is, and match the mouth movement exactly to that time.
The animation is mostly stills, and what movement there is, I have no complaints about.
The voice acting is all right for how little of it there is. It sounds just a little fuzzy, but unfortunately, I have no idea how to do it any better.
The other sounds work fine. No complaints.
It's been said, but if you're going to submit an animation this short--especially with no preloader or ending--it must be funny. And it's not, really. I won't talk muchabout comedy theory here, but generally, humor comes from the unexpected or the out-of-place. I expect that knife to go straight into that guy's eye, and that's what it does. I don't laugh. If the knife had been sniped out of the air and the knife thrower shot next, that would have been funnier because I wouldn't have expected it. Of course, there's a lot more to it than that, and doing what I said and nothing more would still be fairly lame. Like voice acting, I'm not sure I could do much better.
I also don't find it funny :)
Well I didn't expect such a helpful rewiev, thak you!
Ye, I will have to learn how to add replay buttons and stuff
If you're going to make something this short, you should put that much more effort into making it funny, original, and well-animated. Plus, the best "super-short" films are those that actually draw their punchline off the fact that they're short. So people are going to expect things as short as this to be extremely good gags to make up for it. Not saying this isn't funny, but it's really nothing special.
Still, it's a good effort for a first animation, kudos on that.
But please, PLEASE, put a preloader on it next time.
Ye, I submited it too quickly and didn't care about any buttons and scripts.
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