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front paged? : o that will be gone soon, but thank you!
Hamsters burn a house. I'm a little dissatisfied about the legnth of this one
Didn't capture my attention from the first 20 seconds. "I wanna be a hero" wasn't an attention grabbing line. I ended up browsing the web when the intro credits came up and only heard obscure conversations.
Voices were low, fix the volume and then i'll judge them better.
I'm not sure sedated G rated NickJr theme music is appropriate for hamsters who want to set houses on fire. Just my 2c.
Screw being a hero?!
It was okay, there was humor there but you didn't make the most of it. The joke itself is important but the way it is executed is equally important. In this case, your delivery was hurt mostly by the blandness of the characters' voices (the characters' voices were also indistinguishable from one another). In other words, because your animated expression is very simple, you have to make up for it with expressive voices (don't hold back on the mic). You got timing down very well in the beginning where the other hamster says "you were watching the documentary, weren't you?", but not so well near the end when the taller hamster decides to go paint the fence instead. The main reason I didn't find the end funny, however, was really because the reason to find it funny was too simple. In the end, the humor was basing itself on contrary common sense, and if incoherent humor is the humor you're going for, then maybe the animated expression and the voice acting should mirror that quirkiness more. Like the voices, this flash had an overall blandness about it, but I admire your effort and can see that you put a lot of work into this. Just keep an open mind and continue to be productive, certain things will become clearer and you'll improve as you go.
Sorry if I didn't explain myself all that well, I haven't reviewed in a while so my analytic thinking is a bit rusty, but by your next submission I'll be sure to get back up to speed and give you as helpful a review as I can! I hope this one was at least a little helpful, though. Nice job and good luck on your next work!
Wow I have to say this isn't really good at all I'm sorry but the drawings are fair at best you used your voice for all the characters (you could have changed your tone even if you did I couldn't tell the difference ). The fire effect you could see every fire animation you used. But I will give you credit on one thing at least you got the hamsters done right. The story was a bit interesting but the comedy wasn't really that great.
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