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Jun 2, 2012 | 4:43 AM EDT
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Alrighty! Finally ready to submit! (For the most part XD")

Well this has kinda taken me a...YEAR.. to do. Due to my lack of time and...laziness. I have always wanted to create an animated series with these characters. I've had them since I was about 12 ish? Some belong to YoshikoFuru of coarse

This I would say is my first real try at animating, and I defiantly learned A LOT. I now know tons of dues and don't s. I am still frustrated with a lot of this animation, I found is very difficult to find the right sound effects and soundtracks to go with this. That is something major I plan to work on, on ep 2... when ever I finish that.

I do wanna thank all the voice actors that participated in this! You gave life to the characters! Thank you ^//u//^

Also I know it may be confusing at the end... but it will become clear in ep 2. When it comes out.... so until then be confused XD""

But ha-whell... now ya get to watch another "Anime" series. Hope you like!

P.S Here is the dialogue for the middle section. I understand that the text may be to fast

We are humans that contain demon spirits within in our bodies. Everyone is fighting for control over KikenâEU¦ especially Gin. He has been trying to take over YuuâEUTMs third of the island and might prevail. Yuu, Gin, and Renki are the only leaders we have, we have to make sure that our forces are stronger. HeâEUTMs a sinister leader. He takes people who have been taken over by their âEUoeBirth DemonsâEU beyond there point of control. We canâEUTMt let Kiken be over run by the likes of him kai!
much time... we... "live" till about 21.We must protect Yuu! We must protect our territory!



Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

You've got a good storyline, and the art is rather good as well. The styling is not unfamiliar but not unwelcome and the voice acting is on par for the genre. I like it, overall.

I would have liked to have seen the subtitled plot lines acted out by the characters. It also seemed out of place and just randomly thrown in at that point. Felt like it needed something to make it necessary. Something like: "Why do we have to do this?" "You know the answer to that. (plot lines)".

The vocals in the intro were drowned out by the "background" music. Maybe that's just me, but it was hard to hear what was going on.

Keep on it! You've got a gem on your hands and I'd love to see you do it justice.


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

The series needs some more improvements but it doesn't detract too much from the story. The characters are colorful and the story is well written.

Just a few more improvements and it'll be 5x more awesome :D


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Seems pretty decent, but you should polish some things for the next episode such as: music volume, transition from scene to scene, and the subtitles, I could barely see them at certain points of the animation.
Keep it up!

sweetyluli responds:

That's something I plan on working on. Or having some one do for me. Looking for sounds and soundtracks is a real pain XD"


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

I like the animation style but some things really need some working on.
- the voiceover track in the beginning/intro needs to be a lot louder - it's almost uncomprehensible under the music
- the subtitles are not always in their space and sport some unlucky coloring sometimes (e.g. the description of the three leaders - grey font on grey background)


Rated 3 / 5 stars

Right it was okay.

I feel that there is a lot wrong with it though.

Firstly, on the loading screen, with Kai grinning and a light shining over his eyes... You notice the white dot flicker above his right eye when this happens yeah?

Now that might seem like a tiny detail but these little things persist throughout the whole flash. It's like you just need to go round and polish certain bits of animation.

I can understand your desire to submit this after working on it for a year, and well done for the hard work you've put in, but you shouldn't ever settle. Don't be content with a piece of work that you know you could make better if you made that final push, rather than limping over the finish line.

The voice acting was good, in that it was believable (sort of), but the quality of recording let it down.

At one point, Kyle's voice simply stopped and we were left with subtitles to explain the story (about how they have to guard the territory for the 3 bosses, or something). I see you've kindly written that bit of dialogue down in the Author's comments, but why is there no voice acting for that part?

The animation was okay, I can tell that a lot of effort has been put into it, and as you use flash more, you'll discover and develop techniques that will allow you to do so much more with seemingly less effort.

This pieces gives off a "Work in progress" feel, and I can't really give you a fair score because your hardwork has been undone by untidy animation and imcomplete dialogue. The plot is fine, I mean, it's interesting and I look forward to seeing how the story unravels. I just want to enjoy it, and not feel like it's a chore to watch.

I really look forward to more from you, keep up the hard work.

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sweetyluli responds:

Well said. And you're right it is still unploshed. I hope not to repeat that in EP 2.