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Apr 10, 2012 | 2:39 PM EDT

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This is my second cartoon I have ever done, EVER D: So yeah, please provided feedback and criticism, you know anything that you think will improve my animation in the future. This took me so long and I did this so fellow animators can tell me what I did wrong and maybe how I can improve it. No verbal abuse and calling it 'crap' and whatnot, I know its crap, tell me why.

Thank you so much for watching my animation!

Oh and one more thing, in the scene were octodad is in the car driving, the background isn't moving, I want the background to get smaller in the distance as it moves a long. Does anyone know where I can find a tutorial on how to do this? Or maybe you know how to do it? Thanks! xox

All sounds are taken from Octodad the game.



Rated 1.5 / 5 stars April 10, 2012

The animation was a bit choppy, some of the lines weren't connected the whole way, not sure if you did that on purpose and were trying to achieve something with it or not, but personally I think it just makes the animation as a whole look of lower quality.

Some more story or background would be fine as well, going from breakfast to work and then having a 2 week gap to his death is kind of ambiguous and raises the question as to why he waited so long to kill himself. Not bad for a second submission, but it has lots of room for improvement.

dannywithnoodles responds:

Yeah I will try to connect the lines as much as possible next time. It's just that sometimes I don't liek it when the lines connect all the time...I dont know what it is about it. D:


Rated 3 / 5 stars April 10, 2012

i love the idea, however i think the biggest flaw in this toon is the comedic timing
im not an expert, but as a viewer it just felt off to me


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars April 10, 2012

For your second animation, it was pretty good. Keep
at it, because you will quickly get better, considering
how far you are now.

On that note, you art is great, and will only improve,
you have a keen sense of detail, which is good. However,
your writing needs some work. The pacing wasn't bad,
a little inconsistent. If your going to do humor like this, you need
to be a bit more jarring about it. The part where he hung
himself was great, but there was no real build up, just
a few frustrating moments. More to the point, the things
he was having a problem doing, there should have been
a couple more scenes of it, and they should have been
more ridiculous in nature, especially considering the

But that too comes with practice. You are talented, and will
only get better with time.

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dannywithnoodles responds:

Thanks! Yeah I totally agree, I will try to space things out a little better and add more content for a better ending.


Rated 2.5 / 5 stars April 10, 2012

the anime was very small, but was a bit cool! keep it up and give voice or put a few letters to dzer what he is saying so I gave 2.5 stars, but remember if it is larger but the anime is cool, but meaningless if most annoying is ok?


Rated 3 / 5 stars April 10, 2012

Maaan... Poor Octodad D=