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This took me about a week, maybe a little longer. It's pretty short, but I really like how it came out.
I'd love some feedback on how to improve! Thanks :)
Wasnt really funny at all. Your drawing is good.
kinda obvious u put little effort in this, no music besides bad whistling, short flash with no meaning, its tired obviously, and wasnt funny. Try being more creative and use more energy.
I agree with Spazkid but...
My main problem here is the style.
It's just a copy n' paste of...Oney and Pebble. And it suck because it didn't look personnal, it's just look like forced humor and shit. Also the voicework was kinda low, I mean you can't really do a funny voice voice, more annoying than funny.
Because yeah, adding a crappy music and making stupid sound with you mouth doesn't make it funny. Maybe if you had a little more of your humor and not "SpazOneyPebbleRaptor" humour it would be funnier.
Is this really what passes for humor now? Well I guess I shouldn't be surprised. Most of the people on this site are mentally retarded anyway so it would make sense that this is the kind of video that gets rated up.
1st. - Get a better mic for future videos.
2nd. - Practice your voice acting.
3rd. - Try to be original the script for this is a lot like Egoraptor's Poke'Awesome
Hopefully this will help you out
A short film about a park bench
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