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EDIT 3: Yowza! I can't believe how well this was received! ;_; thanks, you guys.
EDIT 2: This is just a character introduction, guys!
EDIT: Hooray for frontpage! Thanks so much!
Thanks to everyone who provided the nice feedback! You're all too kind!
Happy early Valentine's Day, Newgrounds!
This is the beginning of something special.
Featuring animation and writing by me (nalem), and voice acting from Lefthandedsock, Rina-chan, and Kirbopher!
This has been a long time coming, many thanks to everyone who loan a hand in this! It is sincerely appreciated.
Enjoy yourselves and have a good one!
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First of all, the animation was decent. It wasn't anything special, but it got the job done.
Voice acting was a bit sub-par. I could hear some background noise that really didn't have any purpose being there.
Lastly, as far as humor goes, I've seen better jokes on the back of Laffy Taffy wrappers. The concept had promising potential, it just wasn't fleshed out enough. Even if this is supposed to be a short character introduction, that's no excuse for lazy writing. The situation could have been hilarious- clumsy, innocent guy and overly suspicious girl in bed together. I mean, come on! You could have done so much more with that.
I give you three stars.
this was very funny you did a good job and i love how all of it comes together even tho its an accident i think this kind of thing happens to all of us sometimes
This was very well made and funny :D. Only thing I would suggest is maybe reworking Mr. Blacksmith a little. He really doesn't look like he would even be a blacksmith's apprentice, let-alone a proffesional blacksmith. Now, I'm not saying you should make him some burly and hairy man covered in scars. I just think he should at least have a little build to him, and maybe a little more rugged of a look. Now you don't HAVE to change anything about your character at all. If that is how you want him to look, then that is how he should look :). I just feel you should meet in the middle, somewhere between stringy bookworm and nicely built blacksmith :P.
Since its a character introduction, i can say this is very well made, keep the good work! I'm looking forward to your next videos :D
The animations wasn't very fluid though, I think that could be improved. I liked the anime/scott-pilgim-like art-style, but the story was too generic (not a big deal anyway, for an char intro) On overall, I found this very good
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