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It plays in a fictive world, in this video it's I don't talk about this world and it's culture, so it might be confusing. Sorry for that but in later episodes it will be all explained. I hopw you like.
the title is original, and when i google Sernauphia, it shows your flash on the top, cool.
animation is meh but arts are good.
and story sound interesting. i like it.
keep working on the second.
Writing good but...
Your writing is good. The story seems interesting and the script needed just a couple of edits.
I would really find someone to do the animation for you. Either that or let this drop into obscurity and go practice a lot and come back and try again.
I didn't like a few of the voices, the deep voice of one of the demons was off.
What the hell did I just watch?
First of all, the animation is really..... just really bad. Seriously, every movement is just so unnatural and wooden. The only thing more wooden was the horrible dialogue. The worst part is the faces, the expressions almost NEVER change. The eyes just stare off of into the distance like a porcelain doll, it ends up looking really creepy. On top of that, the characters are proportioned awkwardly which makes the animation look even worse. Now onto the story, if you can call it that. It played exactly like a really bad fanfic. The "you can't trust the military cuz there's demons and stuff in it" conversation along with the next scene were just awful. The delivery of the subpar voice acting just made it worse. The only good thing I can say about this flash is that the backgrounds looked ok but that's about it.
How come you can draw entire city scapes really well but the people are absolutely horrific?
Learn how to draw people right before you make another cartoon please. and PLEASE, do not say "Oh it's my style" Because it's not. It's just wrong.
The voice acting and the animation could have been ALOT better. The people's face never changed, and their bodies are too small for their heads. Since it's all made with Movie Clips, the actions look really choppy and cut up. If you improve a bit with this style, or start doing fullbody with a tablet or something, it should work out better.
Hope this helps somewhat.
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