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Feb 2, 2012 | 7:01 AM EST

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A 30 sec cartoon for our animation course at university. It's about a man that gets butt raped by a toilet, then sprouts wings and flies away... All metaphorically of course, in order to sell toilet paper.

If the movie lags at all, try watching on YouTube instead, link is on the title screen.

All 3D work by Scott Waddington - http://www.youtube.com/us er/SWadderz
All 2D work by Matt Paton (thats's me, durr) - http://patonion.newground s.com/

Reviews


HammerGodHammerGod

Rated 4 / 5 stars February 8, 2012

When he started flying I went "Holy shit that's really good movement."

The rest of my review would essentially be a copy of Scampers' one.



ScampersScampers

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars February 4, 2012

3d animation great, 2d animation bad.

The first two times I watched it, I was confused. The third time I watched it, I understood why that was. The 3d animation is great but the guy in charge of 2d animation(Matt Paton apparently) really dropped the ball in this project. The 2d animation follows very little continuity. At first I just thought that things were happening randomly, but after watching it the third time, I understood. The guy walks in with two rolls of toilet paper: one that it bad and causes the toilet to turn into a machine, and the alleged "Cloud Soft" which feels great. But because of the way you edited it(obviously because it's supposed to be short like a commercial and to skip the part where the guy wipes his ass), it's disjointed and confusing. To have clarified this, you could have had one of the rolls fall on the left side and one fall on the right side so as to make some distinction instead of having him pick up both the rolls on the left side. You guys have promise, but you have to work on you scene writing to make sure all the information is clear to the viewer, and don't get lazy. :)


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souledge1souledge1

Rated 5 / 5 stars February 4, 2012

omg cloud soft

i wouldn't be surprise if they my a Carmichael of this one day for toilet paper XD.


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YnekYnek

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars February 4, 2012

Amusing, but there's room for improvement.

An overall amusing advert, with crisp, clean animation, good audio, and a clear, coherent direction. However, I still feel that there is plenty of room for improvement.

For example, there is no audio or voiceover until the very end, where a voice says: "Cloud soft. Wipe with a sheet of heaven." The fact that there are no voices up until this point makes it feel out of place, as if it doesn't really fit. Perhaps just a picture of the toilet roll package, with the line: "Wipe with a sheet of heaven" appearing underneath... Possibly written in poo across an unravelled section of toilet roll, if you wanted to really take the 'toilet humour' direction to the extreme.

Also, I felt that a shot of the guy actually wiping his ass on a cloud would have added a little more humour to the piece. You've already shown him having his butt wiped by a vicious mechanical toilet, so it's not as if this would be an enormous leap. Additionally, without a shot of him actually having his butt wiped by 'heaven' means that there is no real comparison drawn between the razor-robot-toilet and wiping his butt on a cloud. This makes the razor-robot-toilet shot seem a little bit needless and redundant....

Perhaps just a shot of him flying across a cloud, wings flapping madly, dragging his ass across the cloud like a dog wiping it's butt on the carpet.... leaving a stinky brown trail behind him as he goes.... You could even have had his poop-smears spell out: "wipe your ass with a piece of heaven," if you really wanted to. And from there, there are limitless directions in which you could take the humour.

For example, people looking up and seeing the cloud criss-crossed by brown lines, and being confused, or something more extreme, such as brown rain which smells bad, and someone who gets caught in the rain finds a bit of corn in their hair. Parachute jumpers, birds, aeroplanes, flying saucers, angels, God, etc could also have poopsmear related jokes made about them....

Overall, though, the animation isn't all that bad. I just feel as if the writing could have been pushed further, and you could have gotten a lot more comedy into the piece. At the moment, it feels as if the humour is being downplayed for some reason.

So, seven stars / four picos seems like an appropriate score.


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thetkmasterthetkmaster

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars February 3, 2012

Awsome

I'll take twenty!